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Thursday, June 25, 2020

Mission to the moon before and after.





Hi today I did a short story about the moon landing. You are s posed to make a short story copy it and make it better. Like my before was average but my after was better. You can look at my before and after up there in the slideshow. I hope you enjoyed my slideshow thank you for watching.
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2 comments:

  1. Sarah MalliaAugust 18, 2020 at 11:26 PM

    Cool story Eddie, I couldn’t see any difference between the before and after stories though?

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 4, 2020 at 12:19 PM

    KIA Ora Eddie its Henry from marshland school, I like your work on this and I think that maybe next time you could add a little bit more into your post so it is easier to understand and readers have a little bit more to comment on.
    Thanks :)

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